Title

Bleed emotion and,
fill the void that remains.
Roots of ownership,
take hold and spread through your veins.

Put me to sleep and operate accordingly.
Amputate anguish; remove remorse.
Destined to be blind and hopeless,
by what can only be called a curse.

Why are you not indignant,
to this sort of diet?
There is so much more for you to eat,
so why don’t you go out and try it!
Forbidden fruit,
like apples of knowledge.
Hang from trees of experience,
home to such wise foliage.

The dove has become extinct and,
Vultures are all that remain.
Transitory periods of happiness,
Chased absent by this incessant pain.

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~ by Jake Wilcocks on July 13, 2011.

27 Responses to “Title”

  1. I feel like I can relate sometimes. This makes me curious to know more.

  2. I really enjoyed the third stanza–there’s an interaction with the reader there that almost demands a reaction (at least it seemed this way for me).

  3. Very profound, some great lines in there. I especially like “The dove has become extinct and, Vultures are all that remain.” Well written 🙂

  4. Your use of language is sinuous– Amputate anguish; remove remorse. Nicely done.

  5. Wow. Dark, powerful words. I hope the dove isn’t extinct because I’m still trying to find hope at a similarly dark time. Great write.

  6. Really like this one– everyone loves the line about the dove and vultures because it’s awesome. I also love the taste of the phrase: “Put me to sleep and operate accordingly”–like a symphony of syllables in my mouth. Well done 🙂

  7. Mmmmm emotional stuff, and in the nothingness left in its wake, wisdom. Great stuff.

  8. insightful and beautiful words..

    well conveyed emotions.

    🙂

  9. The last line tells it all, breaks the heart.

  10. Some deep thoughts in this well written piece.

    My poem this week: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/25/she-sat-alone-2/

  11. Nice poem!!

  12. I just noticed this doesn’t have a title–you should definitely think of one 🙂 I’m sure you could think of one way better than mine: Thoughts of a Pallbearer.

  13. nice.. glad to be of acquaintance through thursday poets- my posting this week~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2011/08/04/strength-of-faith/

  14. Great read. Loved – Transitory periods of happiness,
    Chased absent by this incessant pain.

    so very descriptive of live at times.

  15. Your poems are edgy and powerful. I see a bright spark of inspiration cutting through the heavy emotion. Keep on expressing. Bless

  16. People express different types of pain in their poetry. There is beautiful pain, ugly pain, frightening pain. Your pain is raw. Still bleeding. And it almost feels like it’s not even a part of you, like it can be removed surgically. Scooped out and cut away. If only it were that easy.

  17. This is a poignant expression of anguish. Well written. . .I hope the expression helps some with the pain.

  18. I can relate to this powerful expression.

    Bleed emotion and,
    fill the void that remains.
    Roots of ownership,
    take hold and spread through your veins. ( love these stanza)

    maybe you’d like to check out mine http://veronicadimarco.wordpress.com/

    happy rally!

  19. Cool. “Put me to sleep and operate accordingly.” – great line!

  20. A disturbing read that is still hopeful. It seems to be telling us not to give up no matter how dire we may feel our circumstances. If we would only pluck what is available:
    “Forbidden fruit,
    like apples of knowledge.
    Hang off trees of experience,
    home to such wise foliage.”
    Good writing.

  21. Such apt imagery with a very dismal message. “Why are you not indignant,
    to this sort of diet?” – sharp.

  22. I liked this poem and I liked each and every line of expression. It was raw and real and cutting. An excellent write, Jake!

    http://kaysalady.wordpress.com/2011/08/30/my-mind-is-frozen/

  23. “Vultures are all that remain”…sure seems that way sometimes!
    Thanks for your wisdom!

  24. This really boils the bones, and fascinating to read. Thank you

  25. Very deep. Happy Rally!

  26. Oh, I can feel that vibe. He’s deep and not happy but it makes for sound reading. You’ve captured what you’ve meant to say excellently.

  27. Love how you transition us between two opposing emotions and realities.

    JP

    http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/09/01/ive-got-you/

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